Swirl Antara

I really like this poem and it is obviously very sad. however, the line 'why'd you go' gets very repetitive. I would put it in less. I realize that repetition ...

I suppose that my life would be simpler, maybe even happier, if I'd never been bitten. My best friend wouldn't be dead...and I wouldn't have killed her. Somehow though, I ...

I suppose that my life would be simpler, maybe even happier, if I'd never been bitten. My best friend wouldn't be dead...and I wouldn't have killed her. Somehow though, I ...

First, this is very short for a chapter. You could combine the 3&4 to make one chapter, and just put the persons name when its from their perspective. ex. Swirl ...

I thought that Ben wanted to see her, so why did she not see him much? just grammatically- I mean, was I supposed to blurt out, "This kid got sick ...

please kind I'm not great at poetry Sometimes time cannot heal We do walk again We heal as much as we can time does not stop for the wounded Although ...

Alright, there is a bit of a blank from the end of the last chapter to this one. Yes, authors do this all the time, bit I found it quite ...

I like it! There's still some things that I would change though. .....“Not really. I keep having the same dream: I’m falling into water, and I can’t even call for ...

I brushed my thick black hair out of my eyes so I could get a better view out the dashboard. I stared at our now sold house as it became ...

Prologue The fog settled slowly over the decrepit town. All was deserted and decayed. The little city had the feel of a long-forgotten, sad place. Kaden shivered, just like he ...

What is rain? But tears of the sky. I would rephrase it as one sentence. -> What is rain, But tears of the sky good job gigi!!

I can't add the avatar I want from my computer! I've added avatars before and it's not too big, so what's my problem?! Any help would be appreciated! thx Ok, ...

The world was wrapped in a thick cotton blanket. Silent. Cold, and stale, with stagnant air drifting across the room in random patterns. It was hot now, cross heat slipping ...

I really like that piece of writing. I do not think that it was too short, short stories are excellent too! But I would like to know what happens next. ...

I listen to: ~Evanescence ~Three Days Grace ~Muse ~Oddly, I like to listen to the music from the play Les Miserables, excellent music there with lots of different moods I ...